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so fun fact lala is still alive in her savefile because she was born and then I immediately threw the save in my folders to store it and made a post for her
also fun fact #2, when I made lala my goddess of beauty I thought I didn't have one already but turns out I did, I just forgot about her. but I think her passing her title on to lala is a cute idea because she is basically a nice old lady who had lots of children : , )
you can all download it if you want (I have no idea what I named it though) and I might turn it into an immortal save with the console where lala goes on a little adventure to home island (its a story mode save) and after that when im in a good ol' Chaotic Good mood I can just have her run around from island to island showing off how pretty she is
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wth does fodder even mean
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5 hours ago, Renio2490 said:
*cough*
Refi has come to take back his adopted... father-uncle thing
(or like stop making him a jerk)I'M SORRY I NEEDED A GRUMPY ONE AND I WAS LIKE "HM. WHO HATES LALA THE MOST??" THEN I REMEMBERED THE ROLEPLAYS LIKE A YEAR AGO
REMEMBER EVERYONES ACTING KINDA OFF BECAUSE LIKE, THEY GONNA GET MURDERED,,
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5 hours ago, Skysplash8 said:
@heyitsgeorgie when will the voting (or whatever comes next) start?
uh in about 3 rounds? so probably for atleast not a week..,
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are you gonna get the new pokemon games? : O
if so which one and have you seen the leaks? I'm getting shield for christmas with a switch!!
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fsngfds im allowed to go on about how to do a english language P1 Q5 gcse (if ur like 13+ and live in england you'll know what that is) right?? its basically "write a good story in like 40ish minutes go"
so 1. 16 marks for SPAG
this doesn't matter just. put in a couple semicolons or something and youre good and use grammar right (the only problem with this is dialogue. I am Thirteen Years Old and I have no idea where you put the commas and stuff for dialogue still,, this is why I usually never use it. just put like.. "I asked her: why do I suck at writing speech correctly?")
and the 24 marks for content and organisation are the important ones
so the first thing to do: always do the picture, never do the "write about a time you felt lost" or something. it wont help you at all
first thing: wheres the picture? think of a basic story that can happen in that setting, for example: its a picture of a boat in the ocean. write something like: persons on boat. big wave comes. person dies. the end. top tip: a big deadly thing happening that results in someones death always works, but you can go for something as simple as: the picture is a desert, so its about a fennec fox that comes out a burrow and catches a mouse, than goes back into the burrow (that's literally what I did for my end of year 8 exam last year (we do gcse exams for our end of year exams in every year)
think of a metaphor or a main theme or premise to write the story based on how you want to describe the setting youre in.
heres some examples:
in the mountains and want to make them sound positive? use your vocab and metaphors n stuff to make it sound like a cake (eg. the snow was like sugar; sprinkled on to the peaks. I peered behind me, and the snow was decorated with my footprints for miles. you get the idea)
In the desert and want some cool juxtaposition? set it at night and talk about how cold it is in the desert at night (eg. the moonlight pierced into the frozen sand beneath my feet) (this is the "theme" I chose for that same year 8 exam)
in the jungle make everything seem like jewels and stuff to make it sound very cool and mysterious (eg. the emerald leaves glistened whenever the raindrops fell on to them tiny shards of golden sunlight shone through the canopy)
and you kinda get the idea. basically, you think about what you want the general impression to be (mysterious, exciting, cute, evil, ect) and think of something that you would think of when you think of that impression (like.. fire and hell when you think of evil. or snakes. snakes always work) and then make every. single. word. possible fit that theme
I think the only way to get like 100% in the content and organization section is to also have an interesting story premise, like a big plot twist or an unreliable narrator or its from the perspective of a monster munch packet or something but I suck at that soo
the general structure I follow is:
start with a short paragraph about where you are, how you feel and what youre doing
do a long description paragraph about your surroundings
a very short action build up paragraph to build tension
a kinda long paragraph where all the action happens and theres a big unexpected event
a medium paragraph concluding and ending the story, do about 50/50 on action and description
(remember to keep doing some description all around!)
the only other thing I can think of is show dont tell (dont put "I was tired" ; put "I dragged my feet wearily behind me" dont put "it tasted horrible", put "all of my taste buds writhed in disgust")
yeah and that's it this probably belongs somewhere else but you can probably use this for other things ;D
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Just now, gamingcookie said:
Prince: why don't you like Lala?
"She think's she's better than everyone else. And the only thing she cares about is how people look!"
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1 minute ago, Flopity said:
LALA KISSED NAIL-POLISH
FDSFHJHFDS
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1 minute ago, SpookyFlower said:
Theres the letters "I,k,n" in here.. does it mean anything?
HOW THE HELL
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12 minutes ago, SpookyFlower said:
Can I ask prince if theres anything under his paw thats covering his face?
"No, there isn't."
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ok im gonna stop im ruining my own game
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Just now, SpookyFlower said:
HE ATE LALA wait no.. her body was intact.. dissapointing.. jkjkjkjk
I mean like
getting closer,
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BTW I DONT WANNA DROP ANY HINTS BUT IM LOWKEY SURPRISED NOBODIE'S FIGURED OUT WHATS UP WITH PRINCE
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20 minutes ago, gamingcookie said:
Meringue and Ossen: Where were you at the time of Yellowjacket's murder?
"Ugh... *sniffle* either with Tanu or asleep.. I can't remember.."
"I was asleep, with Dragon Tear."
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3 minutes ago, SpookyFlower said:
Prince where were you last night when lala was killed?
"In the kitchen eating food."
"Don't judge me-"
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On 10/30/2019 at 1:23 AM, Aetherbee said:
So I am True Neutral when I wanna be, Lawful Neutral when I am lazy, and mostly Lawful Good?
I once met a Chaotic Neutral, They erased like 50 times before they got something good.
Oh wait... I can be Chaotic Neutral when I am drawing something I am used too. (Profile of Dragons and Cats. Dogs too.)
im literally none of these
I do a kinda messy sketch then lineart with no smoothing or anything
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21 minutes ago, spooky602h said:
HhhHHHmmmMMmmm
Prince?
"No."
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8 minutes ago, blackcat for ransom said:
To prince, have you hit your head somewhere? You seem in pain
"..."
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10 minutes ago, spooky602h said:
what about Meringue? Do you like singing?
"No, I can't because im always *ACHOO!* sneezing.."
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Just now, Skyspook8 said:
"Meringue, stop looking shady. They're going to think it was you. Anyways, honey, are you enjoying your stay?" -Love, worried mate of Meringue, Sky
*Achoo!* "Uh, not really. I got really, really sick yesterday and I'm scared about the murderer. What if they go for me?"
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41 minutes ago, spooky602h said:
Ossen, do you like to sing?
"Yes! How did you know?"
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1 minute ago, Flopity said:
to meringue and ossen: do either of you guys know if prince happens to be friends with magnolia?
"Magnolia talks to him sometimes. She's definitely the nicheling he talks to the most."
*Sniff* "Uh, I don't remember, sorry"
Tips for writing nice story-based Niche playthroughs?
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uh make characters have loads of personality almost to the point of not being taken seriously its great