The dialogue not being separate paragraphs hurts
And so do the run-on sentences
and the missing commas
(this from the person who refuses to use periods at the ends of lines lol)
Nobody's gonna blame me for that
Nobody's gonna blame me for that
Nobody's gonna blame me for that
Nobody's gonna blame me for that
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