I need constructive criticism for my latest Fanfic! It's a work in progress, don't worry. Please say what you like, and then say what you think could be improved.
Chapter One:
Execution was in the middle of a training session when she was interrupted by her aunt, who was standing in the mouth of the limestone cave with a calculating expression.
"Hello." Corruption said to Execution’s trainer. "Just coming to check on how my niece's training is coming along." She narrowed her ey