Chronos' Story pt. 1

[Addyx in Wonderland]

(Im not an amazing writer so if im repetitive or theres too many periods, im sorry. Im trying to get better)

Lalia padded through the thick grass. Two gems were dim, and she was exhausted. A trio of bluebirds circled overhead. She glared up at them angrily, staring into their golden eyes. 

She trotted quicker, trying to leave those nasty things behind. While pushing through the brush, she caught a whiff of something that just didn't smell right. She stopped and pricked her ears up, scanning the thicket in front of her.  She continued on, carefully placing her steps. Her eyes darted back and forth, and she was breathing heavily. As soon as she passed by, two green eyes pierced through the grass.

Lalia shivered as the fur stood up on her neck. She slowly turned her head around...

...And came snout-to-snout with a large brown rogue.

[Addyx in Wonderland]

Do you think this is a good average length for these story parts or do you think it should be longer?

[Renio2490]

16 minutes ago, Addyx in Wonderland said:

Do you think this is a good average length for these story parts or do you think it should be longer?

oh my gosh this is amazing! yes this is a good length.

[Addyx in Wonderland]

10 minutes ago, Renio2490 said:

oh my gosh this is amazing! yes this is a good length.

Thank you!! 😸